Climbing Back

Oh I like this~!!!! VEry very well done. You really tie it up so well. I found that you were able to capture my interest right away and I went for the whole ride!

Thank you! I really enjoyed your poem!

I really like this one...and it is so true. Sometimes you need to submerge in the darkness for a while before you can re-emerge a new. I can relate to this one...

The way I see it, you are trying to say that one has to find the courage to move on, even when things get too tough. I agree with the basic message you are trying to covey, however, I agree with FireMonkey in that it is presented in a way that is quite simple. Yet, I think it manages to evoke strong emotions.

What I strongly disagree with, is the notion that there is'' nothing in the dark''. It may seem that way at first, especially when one allows himself to be overwhelmed with negative emotions without trying to understand and deal with them. But if someone finds the courage to understand his negative feelings and deal with them, then he can discover a lot of things about himself while being in the dark. Dark can help you get in touch with all the things about yourself that you wish didn't exist.

Like I said before, there is always light in the dark but you have to be willing to find it. If this is what you wanted to say, then I would like the transition from darkness to light to be presented in a more clear way. If on the other hand, you wanted to talk about a person who loses himself in the dark then you shouldn't have mentioned light at all-as this would be an unknown concept to him anyway.

The line'' there is nothing in the dark'' should be edited in my opinion.

To sum it up, I would prefer a more complex approach and a more complex presentation.

There is a poem called '' Hello Pain'' in my poetry book: From Hell With Love at smashwords, where I talk about this.



Just my opinion.

Thanks to everybody for the feedback so far; I appreciate it all.

This poem was more personal for me than most of what I write and so I wouldn't expect people to see it the way I did.

Fire Monkey, of course I would prefer to ignore you and accept the more positive comments, but I don't like to disappoint. After all, that is not why we joined this particular forum.

I am however torn as this poem was a rarity for me in the sense that I didn't write it in a word processor first, I didn't edit it, I wrote it straight into the browser and submitted. I think it took about 4 minutes in total. A large part of me wants to keep it that way as the things in the poem are from a particular mood/emotion. That is also why the interpretations that have been made don't quite fit with the intention. I think if I were to revisit it, it would be dulled down in many ways because the same essence of realism wouldn't be there any more now that my mood has subsided. Nevertheless, if you think of anything in particular that you would like to see changed, then let me know and I will consider it at the very least.

@wintergirl, the first point of my response is that your interpretations of this are not correct; not in keeping with my intention at the time of writing. That said, you are welcome of course to take from it what you will. The line "there is nothing in the dark" is on one about visibility. Being lost and alone are things that you can only have a reference point for if you can see, so when you are in the dark, those things are nonexistent. It is why I mention later, the eyes adjusting to the darkness - the unseen becoming visible; it is on one level about something else - It is not however, about being lost in the dark nor about finding light in the dark nor even about a transition from one to the other. That is why I will not edit/remove that particular line. As for the rest of it, I shall leave you to your own understanding.

-D&W