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Post by Brigid Briton on Feb 22, 2011 17:50:26 GMT -6
Hello New Members! I hope you'll join me in writing a group poem. I'll write the first line and hope that you will submit one line each. (As you post them, I'll add them to the top of this thread so we don't lose our place). Wait until at least two other people have posted lines before posting another. The poem will be finished when we run out of lines or it looks like we're at a good stopping place. The title of this poem is: What's in the Closet?Line 1:It happened so long ago and yet Line 2: the ghosts of shadows try to stay. Line 3: The strangest soul I've ever met, Line 4: opened a door for me that day. Line 5: It opened on yet another door, Line 6: like mirror on mirror, plays; Line 7: with purple shades adorned, Line 8: a shining light, ablaze. Line 9: Uncurling from a corner, stood, Line10: a figure cloaked in gray, Line11: I wondered if to speak he would, Line12: or shuddering, slink away. Line13: But speak he did, his voice a growl, Line14: a sound of grumbling mutterings. Line15: Waiting for my reply, he scowled Line16: but terror set me stuttering: Line17: "Wha..wha..why does thou muh...muh...mean me harm?" I've a posted an altered photo below in the Artwork section. Please check it out and see if it inspires you to contribute a line! poetry-here-and-now.proboards.com/thread/16/closet-altered-photo Brigid
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Post by Fire Monkey on Feb 25, 2011 7:06:29 GMT -6
Line 2: The ghosts of shadows try to stay Not sure how well I can do this since it isn't really the way my mind works, but as long as a line comes to me I'll be happy to try.
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Post by Brigid Briton on Feb 25, 2011 17:17:15 GMT -6
Hi firemonkey,
Yeah, it can be pretty tough doing a group poem. Not having full control is the hardest part. It's really more about getting to know each other than it is writing a perfect poem.
Does anyone else have a line they'd like to add?
Brigid
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Post by Fire Monkey on Feb 25, 2011 17:24:52 GMT -6
Years ago, before the internet, on a dial-up BBS we did a joint story which was a sort of role-playing game with no rules - we just defined in English what the characters were like and then one person set the scene and we all wrote what we were doing - the only rules were that it had to make a good story, it had to stay within the concept of each character and we had to respect what everyone else was doing.
Like this, it was hard to get a good story out of it but it was a great way to get to know other people. Oh, and it was fun! I hope we can do as well with this poem.
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Post by Brigid Briton on Feb 25, 2011 18:04:23 GMT -6
I've participated in these on another forum and they can get pretty wild and woolly. The poem usually ends up in a far different place than the person who wrote the first line intended. And they usually are great fun. I certainly hope others will join us in our effort here before too long!
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Post by Fire Monkey on Feb 25, 2011 19:35:04 GMT -6
Me too - for it to really work takes several people contributing.
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Post by SweetSilverBird on Feb 26, 2011 2:35:04 GMT -6
Line 3: The strangest soul I've ever met... Hope that one fits next. (I was thinking it would fit a rhyme scheme for 4 line stanzas.. or not)
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Post by Brigid Briton on Feb 26, 2011 10:24:37 GMT -6
Ah, Deb, you set the rhyming scheme for this! That's the beauty of a challenge. My own preference would have been free verse (it's just my thing) but in a challenge, someone else can take the poem in a whole different direction. That's what makes it so, well...challenging.
Great job so far, you guys. Keep those lines coming!
Brigid
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Post by SweetSilverBird on Feb 26, 2011 17:22:24 GMT -6
Nice one! I believe it is Tim's or another person's turn next. Too soon for me.
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Post by Yolande Villemaire on Feb 26, 2011 21:01:08 GMT -6
Line 1: It happened so long ago and yet Line 2: the ghosts of shadows try to stay. Line 3: The strangest soul I've ever met, Line 4: opened a door for me that day.
Line 5: It opened on yet another door Line 6: like mirror on mirror, plays; Line 7: with purple shades adorned
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Post by Brigid Briton on Feb 26, 2011 21:15:30 GMT -6
Hey yolande,
Welcome to the forum. Thanks for jumping right into our first challenge. Looking forward to reading some more of your stuff!
Brigid
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Post by Yolande Villemaire on Feb 26, 2011 21:34:42 GMT -6
Thank you for the welcome Brigid!
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Post by Brigid Briton on Feb 27, 2011 23:04:18 GMT -6
Hey! Are we stuck already? I'm not a big rhymer, so I'll leave to someone else to jump in here. Come on, don't be bashful. It's not like we're skinny-dipping or anything! Brigid
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Post by SweetSilverBird on Feb 27, 2011 23:46:45 GMT -6
Line six: Like mirror on like mirror, plays;
C'mon the challenge is cast.. next!
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Post by Fire Monkey on Feb 27, 2011 23:49:43 GMT -6
Ok, I'll give it a try...
Line 6: With purple shades adorned
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Post by SweetSilverBird on Feb 27, 2011 23:55:54 GMT -6
personally I wouldn't have picked adorned to rhyme with door dear monkey. The rhyme is a b a b I think.
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Post by Brigid Briton on Feb 27, 2011 23:58:33 GMT -6
Hi Deb and Tim,
Thanks for jumping in (almost together). Deb, I deleted your second "like"---did you really intend that to be there?
Tim, yours was actually line 7.
I'm stymied on this one. Hope you guys or someone else will think up a brilliant rhyme!
Brigid
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Post by Yolande Villemaire on Feb 28, 2011 0:02:07 GMT -6
Line 1: It happened so long ago and yet Line 2: the ghosts of shadows try to stay. Line 3: The strangest soul I've ever met, Line 4: opened a door for me that day.
Line 5: It opened on yet another door Line 6: Like mirror on like mirror, plays; Line 7: With purple shades adorned Line 8: A shining light, ablaze
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Post by SweetSilverBird on Feb 28, 2011 0:08:31 GMT -6
I like it. It is already a really nice poem! Never mind firemonkey and me. We are old friends and actually even live in the same apartment complex on the west coast. Yolande, you really did a nice line there!
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Post by Fire Monkey on Feb 28, 2011 0:39:58 GMT -6
Oops, looks like Deb an I were both posting about the same time - thanks for sorting that out and shifting my line to 7 instead of 6 ;D
Yes - I think it is coming alone well.
Deb - you post wasn't there when I started to type so I wasn't trying to rhyme but I think this work well, alternating rhyme patterns - some poets do it and in this case though I had not intended to make it happen, I think it is ok - abab for the first stanza then abcb for the second - or if you prefer you could see adorned as a soft rhyme - not strictly rhyming but with a 'feel' that is close to door ;D
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