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Post by eiken on Mar 14, 2011 13:05:56 GMT -6
in my chair
the cat curled up
in my warmth
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Post by Fire Monkey on Mar 14, 2011 17:58:57 GMT -6
I like it, but then - it has a cat so why wouldn't I like it ;D my cat Kitra likes it too [it's ok for me to speak for her - she speaks for me too - I have a picture of her posting on line  ] One thought, I think it would read better if the last line said "within my warmth" - just a thought. |
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Post by eiken on Mar 15, 2011 4:26:20 GMT -6
Fire Monkey, Thank you for that, I must think about it. I went out to make a cup of tea and when I came back, the cat had moved into my chair, in my warmth but within would work too.  |
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Post by Fire Monkey on Mar 15, 2011 5:04:54 GMT -6
Yes, "in" might even be literally better as far as the meaning goes, though I think either would be correct, I just felt that the extra syllable gave it a better flow without confusing the meaning but as always, it's just my view of it.
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