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eiken Five Star Member Posts: 1,131	clouds (haiku) Aug 6, 2012 17:04:57 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by eiken on Aug 6, 2012 17:04:57 GMT -6 the wind swoops a flight of swallows billowing clouds

Brigid Briton Administrator Bemused. Posts: 2,407	clouds (haiku) Aug 6, 2012 17:08:27 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Brigid Briton on Aug 6, 2012 17:08:27 GMT -6 Nice!
	"Poetry, she thought, wasn't written to be analyzed; it was meant to inspire without reason, to touch without understanding"~Nicholas Sparks

Lisa Arnold Senior Member Believe In You! Posts: 153	clouds (haiku) Aug 6, 2012 20:38:14 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Lisa Arnold on Aug 6, 2012 20:38:14 GMT -6 I like this
	beyond the horizon awaits your fate

eiken Five Star Member Posts: 1,131	clouds (haiku) Aug 9, 2012 14:47:17 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by eiken on Aug 9, 2012 14:47:17 GMT -6 Brigid and Lisa, Many thanks!!

Neal Allen (snowtracks) Senior Member Getting on, Getting along Posts: 300	clouds (haiku) Aug 13, 2012 8:53:17 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Neal Allen (snowtracks) on Aug 13, 2012 8:53:17 GMT -6 Hi Eiken I can see the wind swooping like swallows but a stronger image conjured up is the flight of swallows blown out of shape like a cloud by the wind. Either way, I like the dynamic character of it.
	Our footfalls in the sleeting snow, just white tracks on nothingness. Our history on the beach erased by the very next wave. Do not look back. There is nothing behind you.

eiken Five Star Member Posts: 1,131	clouds (haiku) Aug 22, 2012 2:40:56 GMT -6 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by eiken on Aug 22, 2012 2:40:56 GMT -6 Neal, Thank you for your comments, the clouds did obstruct the shape of the swallows as they tried to fly in formation which was lovely, it shifted them from an arrow to a bow almost, really lovely to watch. Nature at its best!!!