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Post by lambda on Jan 14, 2014 19:04:49 GMT -6
Drink tea in space, listen to the moon baked. Miracle rising, dopamine climaxing. Interstellar weather, except in November. Night sky indigo, beautiful vertigo.
-λ
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Post by Fire Monkey on Jan 29, 2014 15:00:29 GMT -6
I'm not sure I know what you are trying to do here but I have to say that I like the effect. If you are trying to capture a feeling rather than a meaning then you have done it - if on the other hand you have a specific meaning that is 'encoded' in the words then I am not sure I have the right references but it has a sense of implied meaning - like it is saying something that I am not quite understanding and as a result all I am getting is a sense of it [which may be the point - like such poems as "Anyone Lived in a Pretty How Town" by E.E. Cummings]
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