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Post by Mohd. Arshad on Feb 7, 2014 20:44:27 GMT -6
See! The flames of the day sink. Oh! They are not going to die for infinite. They die to rise and rise to die. But we rise to die and rise never to die. Why should i be afraid of death? It is nothing. Nothing. It carries us only there Where awaits for us a new birth. Yes. A new life in His kingdom. Immortal. It will die too never to rise. It will burn in ashes. It can't sting me there. Wait for it do i. Yes. I do To meet my lord to be immortal.
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Death
Feb 20, 2014 21:24:14 GMT -6
Post by Reilley on Feb 20, 2014 21:24:14 GMT -6
Hmmm, there are some very interesting concepts here. I take it that English is not your first language, so will not hold your grammar or punctuation against you.
But the part that struck me here is this: They die to rise and rise to die.
But we rise to die and rise never to die.
I wonder if you might expand upon this idea.
Keep writing!
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saore
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Death
Feb 22, 2014 12:16:39 GMT -6
Post by saore on Feb 22, 2014 12:16:39 GMT -6
Yes, it seems like English is not your first language. Perhaps you can state what or how "it is in these lines?
It (?) will die never to rise.
It (?) will burn in ashes.
It (?) can't sting me there
Sergio
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Death
Feb 23, 2014 3:37:22 GMT -6
Post by Fire Monkey on Feb 23, 2014 3:37:22 GMT -6
I believe I understand but I would like to be sure. I have to say that I like this poem in any case though there is a bit of uncertainty from some of the wording which it would be nice to clear up but I do like the way you have put it all together and I like the grammar as it is mostly, I feel it adds to the flavor of the poem.
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Post by SweetSilverBird on Feb 28, 2014 22:08:11 GMT -6
Am I right in thinking that you are saying that we die to rise forever, and death dies forever at that point? It is such a metaphysical miracle isn't it? I really enjoyed this. Thank you.
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