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Post by Gwen Dubeau on Mar 25, 2014 10:51:57 GMT -6
 Wind Ice Cold Rain Darkness Light takes stage Future unfolds Ice fingers dangle Pink with cold Pricked and worn Gloves, hats Perched No match for the temperature Spring releasing winters noose Whispering hope Into longing ears By Gwen Dubeau Poetic Notions |
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Post by Brigid Briton on Mar 25, 2014 11:07:45 GMT -6
Hi Gwen,
Welcome to the forum. This is lovely. Yes, we've all been longing for Spring, the emphasis being on long, as this winter was. This is a great debut. Thanks for joining us.
Brigid
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Post by Reilley on Mar 25, 2014 12:03:34 GMT -6
thank goodness Spring is springing, I am so sick of shoveling. This is a sweet piece, Gwen, full of frustration at the long season, but ending with hope, and that is a good thing.  |
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Post by Cory Raymond on Mar 25, 2014 19:02:57 GMT -6
Hi Gwen,
Welcome to the forum. What a pretty paen to spring. Hope to see more of your work.
Cory
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Mar 26, 2014 2:39:00 GMT -6
Hello Gwen, a solid poem laced with vivid imagery. I enjoyed the read and I hope to read more of your poetry  |
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Post by SweetSilverBird on Mar 28, 2014 16:34:53 GMT -6
I really liked it too with it's specific imagery. It felt like home. |
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Post by Fire Monkey on Apr 10, 2014 0:25:13 GMT -6
Welcome to the forum Gwen. A lovely poem, I enjoyed it. Is that a specific style or just something that happened to come to you. That is to say, these days there seem to be a lot of new styles popping up with specific patterns of syllables and such that I am unfamiliar with, but then there is also simply a matter of the poet writing what feels right at the moment and not following any predefined pattern so I am unsure which this is. Either way I like it. |
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Post by Daniel Mark Extrom on Apr 11, 2014 7:58:19 GMT -6
Hi Gwen,
"Spring releasing Winter's noose." I like that line!
The noose was pretty tight where I live!
Dan
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Post by saore on Apr 11, 2014 9:23:44 GMT -6
I also like that line. Very nice poem.
Sergio
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