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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 8, 2014 10:25:36 GMT -6
Sable-Silk Sky– A Tetractys
wind
blown leaves
soar across
vacant wheat field
sable-silk sky...train clanks on railroad tracks
©2014 Lisa Arnold
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Post by Brigid Briton on Apr 8, 2014 19:39:27 GMT -6
Yeah, Lisa, I can see this clearly, sitting in a tiny living room, looking out the window, feeling the chill of morning against the glass, the vibration of that clanking train rumbling by...a very neat image.
Brigid
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 9, 2014 2:45:31 GMT -6
many thanks Brigid  |
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Post by eiken on Apr 9, 2014 5:02:04 GMT -6
Lisa,
I too love your imagery and use of the senses for the reader to enjoy. Thank you!!!
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Post by saore on Apr 10, 2014 7:00:30 GMT -6
very nice imagery Lisa. I like it.
Sergio
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 14, 2014 11:07:32 GMT -6
thanks so much Eiken and Sergio |
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Post by kara on Apr 20, 2014 21:51:45 GMT -6
i like it. everything is so soft until the train comes. it completely changes the mood of the poem, as though the train interrupted it.
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Post by Lisa Arnold on Apr 22, 2014 16:07:40 GMT -6
i like it. everything is so soft until the train comes. it completely changes the mood of the poem, as though the train interrupted it. many thanks! that was the feeling I was going for. I wanted to depict a peaceful moment in time that was interrupted by the rush of noise... |
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