The wild and free

[fallencastle]

Oh fair and faithful wind,
Aid thy wind for thy freedom of flight,
As the sound of night that does pierce my heart,
And My falling heart that does tremble at the start,
For the walls that ground my freedom,
These walls that hide me from my home.
Oh fair Society and your faithful loyalties,
My mind evades them yet I love them still,
The stray dogs bristle by the scorn of another,
At the stalking wolf of moonlight days,
Here at the crosswords of my father's strength,
I leap from the mantle made by man,
like the falling feather that does dance with gaiety in the fall,
Running wild and free as the wind is awake in me,
These lonely grounds are mine alone,
Mine alone to bathe naked in spirit,
and mine to wander wherever I please,
And now I am free...

[Fire Monkey]

Ok - a quick comment, and of course it depends on what you want and on your preference so this is just my opinion:

I'm assuming here that you are attempting to give a Shakespearian flavor to your writing and while I see that as a useful tool in some cases, I wonder if perhaps you would reach more people without it. Of course, it is a matter of personal preference but in general, most people today are unfamiliar with older forms of English and as a result, when something is written in such a style it can lead to difficulty in understanding what the poet is trying to express. I don't shy away from older forms at all, but I think they should be used for a purpose - to add meaning or flavor to a work like an accent or spice, whereas here I am not so sure it adds to your poem.