Three into One

[diannet]

Hi just thinking about some of the new short forms of poetry I've explored lately, Pensee (thank you Lisa), Shardorma and thought I would combine them to make one poem. I've added a haiku at the end of mine, but I thought it could be a fun challenge to take three forms that you like and try to create one poem.
I must say I took an easy way out with this but I just wanted to see if it could work...anyway here's mine

Panda's Paradise

Panda sleeps
Curled up in a ball
Soft paws twitch
Sleep running
Lost in dreams of escapades
Beyond the back fence

Away
From the white dog
Who harasses her day long
A barking nightmare on four legs
To peaceful silent playgrounds

Bushland serenades
Where twirling butterflies dance
Panda’s paradise

[Brigid Briton]

Hi Dianne,

A challenging challenge indeed. Perhaps too challenging. This is a wonderful poem about Panda.

[diannet]

Ah it was just an idea, this doesn't flow so well but hey...it was a bit of an experiment. So glad you liked it!

[Callisse J. DeTerre]

I think it flows fine. . . Just free-vers-y if one doesn't know you are combining three forms. I like this, but I guess I forgot and/or didn't know you had a cat named Panda. Consequently, my first read of this was quite different from those thereafter. My mom had just shown me pics of a baby panda and an article about how it is tradition to name them when they are 100 days old.

So I'm lying in bed, only half-awake (insomnia), wondering why a dog is hanging out at the zoo so much that it is driving the poor baby panda crazy. Then I wondered if they eat dogs in China. . . before I returned my focus to the poor caged-in baby panda in. Of course, I then contemplated which side is considered the back fence - furthest from the main entrance? Furthest from the center of the park? Furthest from the people viewing area? Furthest from the shelter area?

For a moment, I thought, "I hope they have a really natural habitat for the pandas." Then, suddenly, I realized your cat is not locked in a zoo. Oops. Lol.

I have an idea for this, but it will take me some time. See you again in the not too far distant future, I hope. Take care, all.

[Neal Allen (snowtracks)]

I enjoyed your story Dianne. I think it is good to experiment with form and come up with new ideas to express new feelings and thoughts. I personally don't like to be too bound to too many prescribed rules. I feel they restrict me. Of course most forms were derived for some reason and they are often particularly good at expressing a certain type of poem. Certain forms of Sonnet I find quite compelling in their structure and I may have a go at one or two of those. In general though I prefer to come up with a form that seems to work for what I am penning at the time.

Anyway, your Panda sounds like a really high quality moggy and those are always good things to have around.

[diannet]

Thanks all. I hope you do have a go Callisse would be nice to see what you come up with, and what forms you choose... Actually Panda has a lovely shady place down by the back fence where she likes to sit, there's a hole in the fence she can look through just at the right height for her...

I don't really like being a slave to the rules either though I do like the short forms. Glad you all enjoyed the poem.