Imaginary That

[Fire Monkey]

I have a friend that no one sees
No one sees except for me
I wonder just how that can be
My friend is real though no one sees

My friend has friends I do not see
My friend's friends say they don't see me
They say I am imaginary
My friend's friends that I do not see

My friend and I make up the 'we'
That both of us can truly see
Perhaps the rest are what can't be
Since all of them just one can see

Copyright May 5, 2014 by Timothy Emil Birch

[Brigid Briton]

Hi Tim,

This has a delicious "Through the Looking Glass" or maybe even Dr. Seuss quality to it. Very clever and charming. My only suggestion would be that you de-bold the two places that you "bolded" since I don't think it really adds anything, and, in the first instance, I think it actually detracts from the flow of the poem. (Same goes for the italics).

Really neat work!

Brigid

[Fire Monkey]

I had wondered about that - it was spur of the moment as I was typing it in just because as I say the poem I say the word "Imaginary" in a sort of oddly stressed way that makes it fit the rhythm and I thought that might communicate the way I was saying it but I wasn't really sure. The poem was a very spontaneous, I wrote it this morning in about 10 minutes.

[hazelmsmith]

I love this so much, it made me think so much of all ouor facebook friends, especially those we are yet to meet in person, some people have said to me, that surely they cannot truly be friends if we haven't met, yet those of us involved in such friendships know just how real and sincere such friendships are. Well written Tim

[Cory Raymond]

Hi Tim,

An imaginative (no pun intended) poem. This would make a good children's book!

I think Brigid was also suggesting that you de-bold the "we" and I concur with that. It detracts from the rest of the poem.

Pretty impressive that you wrote this in 10 minutes time. I've found often that my initial writes don't take long at all, but the edits can go on for what seems like forever.

Cory

[Fire Monkey]

Thanks. Some times a poem takes me a long time to write or it might need a lot of work after the initial write but other times it seems like it just writes itself and does it quite fast like in this case.

As for the bold, I had used bold and italic in the word "imaginary"{like that} which I think was what Brigit was referring to - not sure about the "we" ... have to think on that. What do others think - do you feel Cory is right?

The poem does have a child friendly feel to it

[Brigid Briton]

Hi Tim,

Cory is actually right, I was suggesting that you de-bold the "we" too, not just the various parts of the word imaginary. She must have seen your post prior to your edit to have known this. It just seems a mis-placed emphasis to me.

Of course, you can bold or not-bold as you choose, it's just that it isn't necessary for the flow of the poem and it made me stop at that point and wonder "why?" rather than just reading through it.

Brigid

[Fire Monkey]

Well, perhaps I should un-bold that as well ... when I wrote it I had nothing bold-ed or italicized and maybe it is better that way. I have been thinking on it since Cory commented and with your comment on top of that I think I am sold